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Pickup Lines

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If I asked if you could be here tomorrow
Would you be able to take the chance?
If I asked you to hold me close to you
Would you honour me with this dance?
I may look analogous, to all the others
But give me a chance and I can verify
That I can be different than all the rest
That I’m more than just a cheesy pickup line

I’m just a cliché
I may be overrated but love me anyway
I’m just a cliché
You may not like it but please stay
Stay here, I don’t want to be alone
Make me feel as if I’m known
As more than just a cheesy pickup line

If I asked you to spend the night by the fire
Would you reach for my soul like the flame?
If I asked you to look into my eyes...
Would you still say that I seem the same?
I may look analogous, to all the others
But look into my fearful, needing eyes
Then speak softly to these earnest ears
That I’m more than just a cheesy pickup line

I’m just a cliché
I may be overrated but love me anyway
I’m just a cliché
You may not like it but please stay
Stay here, I don’t want to be alone
Make me feel as if I’m known
As more than just a cheesy pickup line

Hold me close and feel this heart beating
Like a drum, it beckons for another heart
To fill the empty hole inside
Hold me close and place your hand in mine
Let me whisper to your hampered soul
That I’m not like the other guys

I’m just a cliché
I may be overrated but love me anyway
I’m just a cliché
You may not like it but please stay
Stay here, I don’t want to be alone
Make me feel as if I’m known
As more than just a cheesy pickup line
Within this silence I condone
You make me feel as if I’m known
As more than just a cheesy pickup line

~ Bret Campbell/2004
I categorized this as "Teen or Young Romance" because of what it deals with... a kind of stereotype (I hate labelling) that's used a lot in high school when dealing with relationships... at least from what I see and hear.

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nostalgic-with-love's avatar
I love the first stanza the most! :)